the script by parenthesized

11 Mar

Lisa tapped her fingers against the too-white tile.  The click-click-click of her fingernails sounded like the tick of a clock counting down. Or like the revolving barrel of a gun.

Thirty seconds.

Click. Click. Click.

Twenty-seven seconds and a bullet slides into a chamber.


Time was up.  She pulled the white stick from the mug and angled it to face the bright overhead lights.  Two pink lines.  Pregnant.  Expecting.  Knocked up.  Bun in the oven.   Screwed.  The test fell to the ground, and Lisa collapsed into herself.  Her head pressed against her shaking knees.

When she heard the click of the camera, she raised her head and sighed.  “Was that good?  You got the shot?”

“Yeah, great take Lisa.”

“Good, I’m heading out then.”  She grabbed her coat and purse, rushing out of the studio.

Of course, it was just pretend.  She was an actress, and this was her job.  She put on whatever face they wanted: happy, flirtatious, contemplative, disdainful, depressed.  Today’s script called for anxious…and pregnant.  She always delivered even when sometimes the script hit a little too close to home.

When she came home, she pulled a wrinkled picture out of the drawer.  Sometimes, the script almost asked too much of her.  She touched the black and white ultrasound photo, outlined the tiny body of what should have been a beautiful baby girl.

She needed no reminders.

6 Responses to “the script by parenthesized”

  1. ingridfnl March 11, 2010 at 4:43 pm #

    This raised the hair on the back of my neck. Powerful.

  2. Mariah March 11, 2010 at 4:58 pm #

    That’s intense, and very vivid! I like it!

  3. phoenix.writing March 14, 2010 at 5:37 pm #

    Nicely emotional. The title took away some of the impact for me, though; as soon as I read it, I guessed that the beginning was only acting when I probably wouldn’t have otherwise. Still makes me want to find out more–and give Lisa a hug, poor woman. ^_^

  4. J Adamthwaite March 14, 2010 at 9:15 pm #

    I didn’t pay enough attention to the title so it was like a double twist for me! I really liked your spin on the prompt. And I also really liked the ‘’s to show the waiting.


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